The serenity of the heartfelt moment;
You are sitting so adjacent;
I'm trembling but I'm complacent
Feels like I'm swept by the torrent
Or shocked by electric current.
You taught me how to smile.
You taught me how to laugh.
So please show me the way
To your heart and please
Tell me now you'll stay.
Maybe someday I'll find my way
And sing to you like everything's'
An act or play.
So I'll be singing my way
'Til I reach your heart today.
Do you still remember the day
You asked my why I
Live like everyday's November?
I replied with a smile
For you put me on fire.
Maybe you're an ember
That melts my coldness on fire
In just a glimpse of your smile.
Should I play it with my guitar?
Or with a piano that fell from
the star? I hope I can sing
How beautiful you are that
If life is a movie you are
The leading star.
You are sitting so adjacent;
I'm trembling but I'm complacent
Feels like I'm swept by the torrent
Or shocked by electric current.
You taught me how to smile.
You taught me how to laugh.
So please show me the way
To your heart and please
Tell me now you'll stay.
Maybe someday I'll find my way
And sing to you like everything's'
An act or play.
So I'll be singing my way
'Til I reach your heart today.
Do you still remember the day
You asked my why I
Live like everyday's November?
I replied with a smile
For you put me on fire.
Maybe you're an ember
That melts my coldness on fire
In just a glimpse of your smile.
Should I play it with my guitar?
Or with a piano that fell from
the star? I hope I can sing
How beautiful you are that
If life is a movie you are
The leading star.
It's a very interesting piece. To be critical, the vividness of this poem is very lively using many different elements to compare. My only negative comment is that some lines like "shock by electric current" is a bit TOO vivid, by which I mean it is too graphic rather than romantic at some points in some lines. But other than that, for me, I like this perspective of "serenade" showing a vivid description of the very term itself.
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